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Post by Cid on Oct 5, 2009 12:24:05 GMT -5
General
- Favorites icon needs fixnin'. :<
- Zeon Test Korps is listed as "Test Pilot" on the Division Thread.
- Specialist should be the rank AFTER Private for both the SS and MAF. >_>
- Joining page "oywrpg4@gmail.com" needs to be <u>.
ALSO, I would suggest a little note somewhere on the page saying: "BEST VIEWED IN FIREFOX VERSION 3.5. WILL NOT WORK IN SAFARI, AND MAY NOT WORK IN OTHER BROWSERS. IE IS FOR JERKS."
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Draco
Rogue 
Anaheim Electronics Employee
Anaheim Hitman
Posts: 1,240
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Post by Draco on Oct 5, 2009 23:22:52 GMT -5
Zeon Shop Page
Sealed Space Colony
First line says "build" where it should say "built".
Space Use Mobile Suits
"features" is misspelled "featuers"
Gouf
"equipment" is misspelled as "equpment"
Specialty Mobile Suits
"excel" is misspelled as "excell"
Desert Zaku
"modified" is misspelled as "modifed"
Weapons of Mass Destruction
"units" should be "unit's"
Nuclear Warheads
"Duchys" should be "Duchy's"
"antarctic treaty" should be "Antarctic Treaty"
Hacked Information
"sides" should be "side's"
Dummy Units
"accommodate" is misspelled "accomodate"
Double Agents
"receives" is misspelled "recieves"
Variants
"reversible" is misspelled "reversable"
"irreversible" is misspelled "irreversable"
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Post by Cid on Oct 5, 2009 23:27:23 GMT -5
EF Shop
- Defences? Ctrl+f to find and correct.
- "machine gun," two words. Made throughout.
- Refer to maximum defenses as defenses maximum throughout.
- Fix plural'd mobile suits in hangar capacities.
- "Transmissions" should be "Transmission" in all installation entries.
- Add-ons: Listening post should have a bolded (D) to signify detector unit.
- Add-ons: periods after all the Effect explanations.
- Add-ons: Targeting facitiliy needs a comma after "infrared."
- Add-ons: War Factory explanation should not that remainder amounts transfer to next week.
- Add-ons: Nuclear charge needs a comma after tank... "this charge is activated and will detonate when a mobile suit, tank or even infantry triumphantly march into the base."
- Defenses: Defense Satellite has plural armament... "2x 12-tube missile racks." And "defenses maximum" should be "maximum defenses."
- Defenses: Large MPC has a period after the cost... "Cost: 300 RP."
- Defenses: Space Defence Platform has plural armaments as well as a wayward period... "12x 2-barrel beam gun turrets, 2x heavy rocket launcher turret." And "defences amount" should be "defense amount."
- Defenses: Anti Orbit whatever-the-fuck has period at the end of armament... "Armament: 4-silo extended range warhead launcher."
- Mobile Weapons: spacing between mobile suit types. Maybe an extra <br>.
- Mobile Weapons: Decsription needs apostrophes... "Mobile Weapons can be purchased for an MS team, a ship's hangar or a base's hangar."
- Mobile Weapons: Description confusing... "Infantry can be stored in any hangar slot, tanks in a Vehicles, Tanks, MS or MA slot, aircraft in an Vehicles, Aircraft, MS or MA slot."
- Mobile Weapons: Tanks, Type 61 description confusion (awkward)... "its large cannons pose a not-insubstantial threat to Zeon mobile suits."
- Mobile Weapons: Aircraft, Don Escargot "costal" should be "coastal."
- Mobile Weapons: Mobile Suits, GM CCT should have a note that they also perform well in ANY environment.
- Mobile Weapons: Ships, COlmbus variants shouldn't be capitalized... "Better known as an airtight box with engines, the Colombus and its Variants are the EFs main transport craft."
- Mobile Weapons: Ships, Hillock as spaces before armamanet x's. Should be 2x not 2 x.
- Extras: Description needs apostrophe in "unit's"... "WMDs will remain off a units roster page until they are actually used."
- Extras: Nuke description needs "Antarctic Treaty" capitalized.
- Extras: Pilots could add lvl 1 like you've added Ruins and Derelict. Cost: 0 RP.
- Extras: Services need periods after Effect description.
- Extras: Services, Dummy Units... "fleet".
- Extras: Services, Double Agent needs period at end of Note... "Note: Requires a successful build action in enemy territory"
- Extras: Variants, spacing before "Hard" and "Soft" refit headings. Suggested for other shops, too.
- Extras: Varients, ships variants have no infantry listings.
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Post by Cid on Oct 5, 2009 23:50:06 GMT -5
Rogue Shop
- "Guerillas" should be spelled "Guerrillas" throughout.
- Mobile Weapons, Dracken-E/Petite needs hyphens above and before "Note:"
- Mobile Weapons, Ships should have a note in the description of the header that aircraft and infantry can also be used for cargo.
- Mobile Weapons: Ships, FTC misspelling of "personnel"... "This medium size transport craft is used both by the CMC, and by the EFF as a personel carrier."
- Extras: Services, Guerrilla Contact misleading explanation. Shouldn't you include other places other than Earth or can this only be purchased on Earth?
- Extras: Services, Riah support need x after number of Torieres and Dracken-E's. Dracken-E needs a hyphen.
- Extras: Services, all Effects and Notes need periods after them.
- Extras: Variants, Custom Headspike could be elaborated on. What, if any, are the bonuses other than cosmetics.
- Extras: Variants, all ship refits should have their descriptions separate from their "Notes:" and they should have ther cost come after the "Note:" like in the MS refits, or the MS refits should have their "Notes:" moved down to the bottom. OR the MS refits should have an "Effect:" before their descriptions.
- Extras: Variants, periods after entries.
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Post by Cid on Oct 6, 2009 23:39:54 GMT -5
General
- Guerrilla image and link broken on Rogue Shop.
- Spelled "Guerrillas" wrong on Division thread.
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kuriboh
ZMF 
Registered Newtype
Is Miang. Maybe.
Posts: 1,738
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Post by kuriboh on Oct 7, 2009 7:10:30 GMT -5
itt cid has too much free time.
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Post by Cid on Oct 7, 2009 8:48:47 GMT -5
This thread is for typos. That is not a typo. Please refrain from posting inconsequential gibberish.
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Post by Cid on Oct 7, 2009 20:54:09 GMT -5
General
- In all the shops, under "Mobile Weapons," the description reads... "Infantry can be stored in any hangar slot, tanks in a Vehicles, Tanks, MS or MA slot, aircraft in an Vehicles, Aircraft, MS or MA slot." Should be "a Vehicle."
Rogue Shop
- "guerrilla contact," should be "Guerrilla Contact." And reread the description. There is a wayward "on" in there.
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Draco
Rogue
Anaheim Electronics Employee
Anaheim Hitman
Posts: 1,240
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Post by Draco on Oct 11, 2009 15:03:49 GMT -5
Reporting on "Timeline"
Opening description
"Whereas" misspelled as "whearas"
"edited" misspelled as "editted"
0035
Maybe should say "Minovksy's"
0060
"Separate" misspelled as "seperate"
0079.01.15 - 11:20
Should say "begins" not "begin"
0079.01.16 - 4:24
"Withdrawal" is misspelled "withdrawl"
0079.02.13
"supremacy. In order to" should be changed to "supremacy. in order to"
0079.03.13
"Withdraw" is misspelled "withrdaw"
0079.03.18
"Cartpentaria" is (according to my MS Word spellcheck) misspelled "Carpenteria"
"0079.05.22 Operation Hellion, an EFF attack on the ZMF orbital supply fleet, fails. " needs to be formatted properly.
0079.06.12
"Commissions" is misspelled "comissions"
0079.06.12 and 0079.08
Maybe you mean "Riah Patrol Ship" instead of "Riah Defense Ship," because the shop says "Patrol" and not "Defense."
0079.07
"possess" is misspelled "posses"
0079.08
"Simultaneously" is misspelled "Simultaniously"
0079.08.21
Is "inassiable" supposed to be "unassailable"?
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Frenzy
ZMF Officer
Commander
Could be Ramsus.
Posts: 2,152
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Post by Frenzy on Oct 11, 2009 16:24:18 GMT -5
There's still a bit of confusion in the wording on whether the Dopp or the Tin Cod has an advantage over the other.
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Post by Cid on Oct 11, 2009 16:59:19 GMT -5
General
- You'll need to capitalize "defenses" in all the shop pages. As well as "defense satellite."
- Rogue shop... capitalize "guerrillas."
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Post by Cid on Oct 12, 2009 22:44:44 GMT -5
Bases
- Open remark, "seperate." Spell it "separate."
- Zeon Patrols - Black Tri-Stars - "colorscheme." Spell it "color scheme." "Jetstream" has too many "m's."
- Zeon Patrols - Cyclops team - "guerillas." Spell it "guerrillas." "camaraderie."
- Zeon Patrols - The Pink Panthers - "colorscheme." Same deal.
- Zeon Patrols - Cima - "recieves." Spell it "receives."
- Bases - Alezandria text page - "Mediterranean," capitalize. "Front line," two words. Capitalize "Duchy."
- Bases - Kimberlite text page - "KIMBERLITE'S," apostrophe. "Zeon's," another apostrophe.
- Bases - Califronia Base text page - "Zeon's," apostrophe x2. Repeated "important." Under Garma description, "father's."
- Bases - New York text page - Table needs to be width=100%. "Zeon's."
- Bases - Mexico City text page - "Federation's."
- EF Patrols - The Desert Eagles - "out-flying."
- Bases - Jaburo text page - South Burning description, "totaled," "receive."
- Bases - Rio de Janero - spelled "Janeiro." Correct throughout.
- Bases - Azores text page - "Janeiro."
- Bases - Hughendon text page - "shore leave."
- Bases - Torrington text page - "indestructible," "openable" not a word.
- Bases - Dehli text page - "Federation's."
- Bases - Lhasa text page - "Zeon's."
- Bases - Manila text page - "Philippine."
- Bases - Southeastern Asia HQ text page - 08th MS description, "camaraderie," "guerrilla," "inseparable."
- Bases - Belfast text page - "Federation's." Capitalize "Duchy." "Ryer's."
- Bases - Ceylon text page - "guerrilla, "judgment."
- Bases - Pezun text page - "Gihren."
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Frenzy
ZMF Officer
Commander
Could be Ramsus.
Posts: 2,152
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Post by Frenzy on Oct 14, 2009 16:35:38 GMT -5
In regards to having seperated bridge and gun crews, here are the results. If it's not on the list, then there wasn't a ship matching the criteria.
Alexandria - Check
Kimberlite - Check
Jaburo - Check
Rio - Check
Augusta - Check
Azores - Check
Hughendon - Check
Torrington - Check
Baikonour - Check
Odessa - Check
New Delhi - Check
Lhasa - Check
Belfast - Check
Consantinople - Check
Ceylon - Check
Honolulu - Check
Luna II - Check
Side 7 - Check
Pezun - Check
Grenada - Check
A Boa Qu - Check
Axis - Check
Luna II Defense Fleet - Check
Blex Fleet - Check
Ohm Fleet - Check
Tianem Fleet - Check
Wyatt Fleet - Check
1st EFGF Resupply - Check
2nd EFGF Resupply - Check
EFSF Resupply - Check
Delaz Fleet - Check
Side 3 Defense - Check
Bomer Fleet - Check
Conscon Fleet - Check
Dren Fleet - Error
Helsing Fleet - Error
ZMF Earth Resupply - Check
Riah Defense Fleet - Check
So, mostly good except for Helsing and Dren.
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Post by latooni on Oct 14, 2009 17:11:23 GMT -5
Fleets, Patrols, and Bases with Detector units with no (D):
- Alexandria
- RF-1
- RF-2
- Kimberlite
- RF-4
- 14th Airborne (North America Patrol)
- California Base
- New York
- Mexico City
- Jaburo
- Rio de Janero
- Vladivostok
- Augusta
- Azores
- Hughendon
- Torrington
- Baikonour
- Odessa
- RF-3
- New Delhi
- Lhasa
- Manila
- SEA HQ
- Archangelisk
- Belfast
- Constantinople
- Malta
- Ceylon
- Honolulu
- 1st Orbit Patrol (Earth Orbit Patrol)
- Solomon
- Pezun
- Granada
- A Baoa Qu
- Amador City (Mars)
- Axis
- EFGF 1st Resupply Fleet
- EFGF 2nd Resupply Fleet
- EFGF 1st Naval Convoy
- EFGF 2nd Naval Convoy
- EFGF 3rd Naval Convoy
- Delaz Fleet
- Side 3 Defense Fleet
- Solomon Defense Fleet
- Bomer Fleet
- Conscon Fleet
- Dren Fleet
- Helsing Fleet
- ZMF Space Resupply Fleet
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Post by Cid on Oct 14, 2009 18:06:16 GMT -5
EARTH BASE #'s
Alexandria (B): 24 def, 15 inf, 40 vehi, 30 MS, 0 MA
- needs 0 vehicles remaining
- gone over 5 MS and only taken up 4 MA slots. Where is the one MS?
RF-1: 5 def, 1 inf, 3 vehi, 3 MS, 0 MA
- needs 1 infantry remaining
- all else is fine if 2x vehicles are taking 1 MS and 1 MA slot
RF-2: Same as RF-1
Kimberlite: 34 def, 10 inf, 33 vehi, 36 MS, 0 MA
- gone over 25 MS by 11 (no Englarged Hangar)
RF-4: Same as Rf-1 & 2
California Base (B, H): 50 def, 20 inf, 46 vehi, 32 MS, 0 MA
- needs 4 vehicles remaining, not 6
- needs 3 MS remaining, not 8
- needs 5 MA remaining, not 0
New York (B): 28 def, 20 inf, 41 vehi, 22 MS, 0 MA
- gone over 40 vehicles by 1
- needs 2 MS remining, not 4 (1 slot taken by vehicle)
- needs 5 MA remaining, not 3
Mexico City (H): 9 def, 4 inf, 25 vehi, 15 MS, 0 MA
- CORRECT
Jaburo (B, H): 95 def, 30 inf, 149 vehic, 22 MS, 0 MA
- gone over 90 def by 5
- gone over 90 vehicles--28 in remaining MS, 10 in MA--by 21 vehicles (slots)
Rio de Janeiro (B, H): 40 def, 20 inf, 67 vehic, 12 MS, 0 MA
- need 1 MA slot remaining, not 0
Vladivostok (H): 19 def, 4 inf, 25 vehic, 13 MS, 0 MA
- need 0 vehicles remaining, over 5--they go in MS
- need 0 MS remaining
Augusta (H): 20 def, 4 inf, 29 vehic, 7 MS, 0 MA
- infantry missing from remaining space
Azores (H): 38 def, 8 inf, 73 vehic, 14 MS, 0 MA
- needs 2 def remaining
- gone over 50 vehicles--11 in MS, 5 in MA--by 7 vehicles
Hughendon: 29 def, 7 inf, 44 vehic, 22 MS
- order of Remaining Space needs to be fixed.
- need 11 def remaining, not 10
- need 3 MA remaining--4 vehicles take up 2 MS slots and 2 MA slots
Torrington (H): 25 def, 10 inf, 75 vehic, 5 MS, 0 MA
- need 15 def remaining, not 0
Baikonour (B, H): 50 def, 20 inf, 50 vehic, 40 MS, 0 MA
- FIRST CORRECT ONE
Odessa (B, H): 50 def, 20 inf, 50 vehic, 39 MS, 1 MA
- ALL CORRECT
RF-3: Same as RF 1-1,000,000
New Dehli (B, H): 40 def, 16 inf, 64 vehic, 11 MS, 0 MA
- ALL CORRECT
Lhasa: 30 def, 10 inf, 34 vehic, 26 MS, 0 MA
- gone over 25 MS by 1, move to MA slot
Manila (H): 15 def, 4 inf, 22 vehic, 12 MS, 0 MA
- defenses capitalized
- need 0 vehicles remaining, not 4 (the remainder go to MS)
- need 4 MS remaining, not 6
Southeast Asia HQ (H): 4 def, 4 inf, 32 vehic, 7 MS, 0 MA
- ALL CORRECT
Archangelisk (H): 16 def, 4 inf, 23 vehic, 13 MS, 0 MA
- gone over 20 vehicles by 3 (the remainder goes to MS)
- need 8 MS remaining
Belfast (H): 40 def, 10 inf, 68 vehic, 12 MS, 0 MA
- ALL CORRECT
Constantinople (H): 33 def, 10 inf, 37 vehic, 36 MS, 0 MA
- ALL CORRECT
Malta (H): 8 def, 3 inf, 30 vehic, 5 MS, 0 MA
- ALL CORRECT
Ceylon (H, B): 26 def, 20 inf, 77 vehic, 14 MS, 0 MA
- gone over 50 vehicles by 27 (remainder go in MS)
- goner over 35 MS slots by 6 (remainder go in MA)
- gone over MA slots by 1
Honolulu (H): 40 def, 10 inf, 71 vehic, 13 MS, 0 MA
- ALL CORRECT
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